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October 17, 2008  Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Characterization, Plot, The Craft   3 Comments

Bunny Trouble rolls over another beta reader, drawing her into the story and putting her into my world. Caroline weighed in last night and I respect her opinion mightily. She has very engaging and honest prose even in her casual writing. When she gets going, it is a delight to read because it is personal and she strikes me as someone comfortable in her own skin.

She thoroughly enjoyed the novel.

Moreover, boy-howdy did I get a lot of feedback! Secretly, I was expecting her to deliver the verdict of “crap,” and that had less to do with a lack of self-confidence than my overtly analytical nature. The Hack Writer is, after all, an arrogant ass. The likelihood of a first-time novelist getting the “crap” verdict from an honest genre reader/writer is high.

I struggle and worry about prose, but life throws you a cure. Sure, I pop up a grammatical boo-boo and the wretched mangle of sentence structure and every time someone points it out, I am embarrassed.

The real feedback I am getting however, is not “your prose is the suck,” but rather matters pertaining to plot, style and characterization.

Things I absolutely cannot have in my novel:

  • Subplots that make no sense
  • Preachy-ness
  • Gratuitousness without a reason
  • A slow start

Caroline delivered a good amount of feedback in this area, and some of it mirrors what I heard from David #1. I need to hear from two others, but, my 8.3 readers, I believe we have a winner. There is a mile of difference between “your story is boring” and “your prose is bad” to “fix this, fix that, and when can I have the next book?”

Beta feedback is wonderful, as are my beta readers. The feedback thus far will let me spit out Draft 3 a month early. The feedback was that good.

I win critique!



  1. godkingtimmy October 17, 2008 at 12:19 pm

    I get that too, except its followed by “you should probably die, too” and i’m like, “thanks mom”.

  2. J.C October 17, 2008 at 12:39 pm

    Very cool! You must be thrilled that the feedbacks been so positive and you’ll be able to launch into draft 3 early.

  3. Anthony October 17, 2008 at 1:10 pm


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