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September 03, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Plot, The Craft, The Wife Unit  0 Comments

Finished post-outlining and deleted the fluff. CHOMP. Added a few bits at the end.

I am on page 23 out of 360 (1.5 line space is what I edit at) of my grammar check/readability pass. This consists of fixing glaring errors and tightening, turning my word smiting into my prose. At the end of this process is officially Draft 2.

Now I am at 149,997 words. The word count has nowhere to go except down.

I also printed chapters one and two for The Wife Unit to read tomorrow. She reads my blog, and informs me she does not necessarily agree with my open door sex policy. This is from the woman who said the Meyers vampire books did not have any steamy vamp sex scenes (pout). At least she said she would keep an open mind about it, and what more could a man want out of a wife?

Done for the evening. Beer now.

I can hear my mother now…

September 03, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Plot, The Craft  2 Comments

…”so if Ken jumped off a bridge, would you do it to?”

A Question of Ethics

The man knew he was a murderer. He objectively viewed his evilness on a scale between “drunken man killing his wife’s lover” and “psycho-torturer serial killer”. He was leaning firmly towards the latter. His road to Hell was paved with both good and bad intentions, and here he was, at the apex of his vileness.

Motivate this!

September 03, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Characterization, The Craft  0 Comments

Q: What motivates your minor characters?
A: Not getting shot.

I got your minor character motivation, Baby. I got it covered.

Sorry Megan

September 02, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Characterization, Plot, The Craft  3 Comments

No sooner than I started my post-draft outline then I found over 2000 words to cut. Many of the plot points to a minor character, Megan, had to go.

As a reader, I love novels with multiple plot points that explode from a single point and radiate outward, connecting infrequently if not at all until the last portion of the book where they intersect and fall back to a single point like some literary singularity.

As a writer, I try to uphold to that plot style while remaining as tight as I can to the main story. Megan’s story, while very interesting to me, seemed like I was enamored of Megan and was more interested in exploring just the person she was instead of providing her with a motivation that the reader could relate with and sympathize. Her story exploded outwards and kept on going, never to circle back. That was not good.

Deleting 2000 words from Megan did not hurt her one bit. In fact, she became more… mysterious. Why does it not bother her that her B&B is seemingly haunted? How is it possible that she is able to make these huge intuitive leaps to a conclusion, while the main character has to use logic and analysis to arrive at the same place? Why is the Catholic Priest so very interested in what she has to say?

Ah, the details and answers I leave for another time. They are interesting, but not as interesting as the rest of the story.

Draft Uno

September 02, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Plot, The Craft, The Wife Unit  2 Comments

First draft, finished. 

I wrote the epilogue during my lunch break and am quite enamored with it.  It is a heartfelt and a depressing bit of writing, true to the theme of my novel and ultimately a great tie-end to the next part of the story. I don’t coddle my readers, and at that point they shouldn’t be surprised if I take the darker path. 

I started Bunny Trouble a little under six months ago, it took me twice as long to write it as my first novel, not too shabby for a 152,000 word manuscript. As my first draft, I am very pleased with the way it turned out. 

My next steps:

**I am going to proofread Bunny Trouble for glaring grammatical errors.
**Then I give a copy to my wife and wait for feedback.  Can it pass The Wife Unit?

Assuming she likes the book and doesn’t beat me over the head with own manuscript, I will then outline the book. It is one thing to have an outline in your head and write a novel, quite another to see if after the fact I can assemble a coherent outline. It is a trick I leaned and suits my writing style perfectly, a great way to expose logic issues and unnecessary plotting. Then I am off to: 

**Tighten the book
**Expanding my feedback circle to five of my friends
**Find an editor

Those things don’t have to happen in that order. I’m a man who likes efficiency after all. Some tasks were designed to run in parallel.

Wow. What a fun and interesting journey this has been. What should I write next? The choices, it hurts!


Just one more thing.

September 01, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: The Craft  0 Comments

Done with Bunny Trouble at a bit over 150,000 words, except the epilogue, which I am not convinced I want. I will write it anyway and see what happens.

Hour past bedtime. Sleep now.

I feel great!


August 31, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: The Craft  3 Comments

1200 words today, most of it my final action-packed scene of avenging goodness.

PAX has kicked my ass. Going to go pass out now. I can’t write when I am tired. The words come out Teh Suckith.

Tomorrow I might just be done with my first draft!

Sexless Luvah

August 31, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: The Craft  3 Comments

Ken writes:

How would you describe your relationship with your writing?

My writing is my lover
Intimate, raw, unconditional
Honesty begets rewards
If I stray, I feel worse than guilt
I feed her creativity
Like a peeled grape
She demands nothing
But returns everything

PAX Irony

August 31, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Not Exactly Random  0 Comments

No sooner did I blog about a second-hand suggestion from Wil Wheaton about writing (for example, his latest post), then I saw him at PAX. He was at his booth with his friends, not talking to any PAX attendee. No one was coming up to talk to him!

I so so desperately wanted to go up to talk to him about writing, but alas, that was not meant to be. I had with me Thing One, and he was expired, tired with dropping blood sugar. As any parent with a child like this would tell you, the singular goal in such situation is getting home as soon as possible for a meal composed of real food. To ignore Thing One’s necessary nutrition intake was to invite disaster.

Maybe next year! What a stange small world we now live in…

There are cuts and then there are cuts

August 31, 2008 Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Characterization, The Craft  1 Comment

Writing must be a learning process. As a reflection of life, even of entertainment value, if there is no growth then there is stagnation. Writing, my creativity in particular (results may vary per package), needs both incremental improvements and proper reflection. What did I learn today?

I shared a conversation with Reader David on making cuts (from this topic) and I concluded the suggestion offered by Wheaton in putting cuts into a separate cut document is valid. I came to this as I encountered writing filled with characterization, a fun look at life and death. It was a good piece of writing but I realized it was not adding to the entertainment value of my story.

I will be damned before I delete that permanently. An enormous amount of research went into that theme, going so far as to buy used and new books (rather than use the library) on the topic to broaden my horizons. This type of research gets the juices flowing and as an unpublished novelist, I need all the juices I can get! Even if I was to delete it out of my novel without looking back, it did broaden my horizons.

That bit of writing is unto itself, research material. I could no more delete it as could throw away one of the books on the topic I bought with my hard earned money. It is writing I would not be able to recreate simply sitting down and typing.

I made a cuts.docx file and off it will go.

I bumped into my inner capacity to recall the main details of my cuts due to the complexity of the details involved. That tells me two things. One, I have never done a bit of writing as I have in Bunny Trouble. It is unique. How exciting!

Two, I excite easily.