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Opening Paragraphs

April 24, 2012  Author: Anthony Pacheco Category: Not Exactly Random, The Craft   15 Comments

Of every novel I have written (or started to write), except my very first fanatic try-out novel, printed and hidden under the bed. Literally.

Leave a comment on which paragraph is your favorite!

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Ezekiel did not lead a normal existence for a sixteen-year-old. He understood this only when Sister Lucinda made an unusual and quite uncommon announcement at dinner.

“I’m pregnant.”

The Baby Dancers, 1/2 of an outline. But it’s a great 1/2!

Reading a book in his right hand while holding his sword in the ready position in his left, the Gaterunner prepared himself for a rude interruption. At any moment, a Reader could burst through the door and interrupt his reading. Hence the sharp metal pokey thing, poised, ready to take umbrage at a disruption.

–Untitled, uncompleted, outlined

The alien felt sex with humans was addictive as it was necessary, bringing to mind the quaint human expression “having your cake and eating it too.” Humans used sex for fun and reproduction. She thought it funny she occasionally added “food” into the mix. Sometimes, she wondered if some other species in the galaxy took it a step further by adding some other basic function to sex like “breathing.”

Bunny Trouble, 2 drafts completed, book needs work

I should have known it was time to leave the nest at the age of three-and-a half when the human females, my father included, started driving me crazy.

–Untitled, uncompleted, outlined

The man wearing two swords coming through the door was dripping with water, and when the door closed behind him, he stood there, letting the water drip off his travel cloak on the flagstones provided just for that purpose.

–Untitled, ten pages of farting around.

“Andy, you’re in my tree again. People will talk,” Tabitha said.

–Untitled novella, uncompleted, outlined

Wisteria Heights High School students Jerry, Courtney, Davis, and Will, led by Cheerleader Captain Miranda, were putting the final touches on their plan to kill Alexander, the varsity wide receiver, and his girlfriend, Taylor.

–Starflame Pilot, uncompleted, outlined

Cadence Prosper was counting down the days to her sixteenth birthday where she could finally free herself from her body and integrate herself into society.

–The Rat Princess, uncompleted, outlined

When she was three, Anathae came to understand Momma was not like the other village wives when Momma tried to kill Papa with a broom.

Dragonsong, uncompleted, outlined (although that opening paragraph is rough, it makes me giggle)

Commodore Philip Connery eyed the sish in front of him, looking for a hint of weakness as Captain Natalie Belton tossed her cards down in disgust. Natalie was the reigning poker champion, but Heisa, the vampiric sish, was kicking their asses.

The First Casualty of War, completed

Queen Oneesha found the Huntress she meant to kill in a hammock on one of the countless tropical islands on her own planet. Sish throughout known space liked to visit for a romp—their endless white sandy beaches on the bluer-than-blue tropical sea were, in onto themselves, a signature attraction. The Islands of Jephinae also had one other feature sish loved, and that was a preponderance of dangerous predators.

–Children of the Goddess, uncompleted, outlined at one point, but recently tossed. Also: ick.

When Jeanne Flanders came downstairs to leave for school in her ceremonial Pledge dress, her mother dropped her cell phone, placed her head in her hands, and sobbed.

–Startforged Maiden, uncompleted, outlined

“Lexus, your husband is an unmitigated pain in the ass,” says Mitchell, the other husband, as soon as I take the call.

Armageddon’s Princes, completed. Book 1 of the Lexus Toulouse Mysteries

My PTSD therapist told me, before he died and broke my heart, that, despite my aggressive desire for justice and a physiological and pathological need for constant sex, I was a caring, nurturing woman.

The Wælcyries Murders, completed. Book 2 of the Lexus Toulouse Mysteries

Ender, my lover I had a fling with seven months ago, just told me she was pregnant with my child, a pretty neat trick considering I’m a woman.

–Death by Lingerie, work in progress. Book 3 of the Lexus Toulouse Mysteries

While driving to pick up her freshman photographer boyfriend so he could take pictures of her prancing around the Colorado farmlands, Sarah was certain she won the kissing lotto.

The Lightning Giver, completed

15 comments on: Opening Paragraphs

  1. J.C April 24, 2012 at 10:19 pm

    I think my fav is for Starforged Maiden. That said, I’m pretty sure that this entire post was engineered to taunt me with the first paragraph of Death by Lingerie.

  2. Ken Kiser April 25, 2012 at 12:32 am

    Lots of good stuff here! But, if I had to pick one, I’d have to say I like the untitled one that starts “I should have known”

    Can’t say why that one is my favorite, but my eyes kept returning to it so many times, I figured I should give it my vote before it bit me.

    • Anthony - Rehabilitated Hack Writer April 25, 2012 at 9:25 am

      Hi Ken,

      You’re eyes are drawn to a personal favorite of mine. The main character isn’t an alien, but she’s not human. Raised by human females with her lone non-human mother, life is good until she hits puberty at 3 1/2. Then all the stupid crap humans do start to drive her crazy, and she leaves home to learn how to become an adult.

      Whereupon she realizes that home had a lot of things going for it. It’s a sci-fi coming of age novel. With guns. And lots of hot teen sex. And space ships.

  3. leecow April 25, 2012 at 4:43 pm

    Leaving home at 3 1/2. Channeling Stewie again eh?

    • Anthony - Rehabilitated Hack Writer April 25, 2012 at 5:59 pm

      Well, she does have 4 CPUs in addition to her cyber-goo brain.

      She’s a little smarter than Stewie. 🙂

      In any case, which opening paragraph stood out for you?

  4. Leigh K. Hunt May 1, 2012 at 7:46 pm

    My favourite:
    When she was three, Anathae came to understand Momma was not like the other village wives when Momma tried to kill Papa with a broom.

    Everything about that opening just makes me want to read the rest of the book. You have completely and utterly captured my attention 🙂

    • Anthony - Rehabilitated Hack Writer May 2, 2012 at 7:34 am

      It’s an interesting epic fantasy book. Girl meets dragon. Dragon loses girl. Dragon goes on unholy rampage to rescue girl. Many people die in a fire. Bittersweet ending.

      • Leigh K. Hunt May 2, 2012 at 1:54 pm

        Brilliant. Well – you know where I am when you’re ready to send it to someone to read 🙂

        • Anthony - Rehabilitated Hack Writer May 2, 2012 at 5:22 pm

          Leigh, I have to say you are really good for a man’s ego. 🙂

          Do you want to be an Alpha reader or a Beta? I have some of this story already. I have a chapter or two that already has seen extensive revision to improve the voicing of the main character.

          • Leigh K. Hunt May 6, 2012 at 8:23 pm

            Thank you!
            Yes – I have got it, and I have even started reading 🙂 Problem is – young Abby has been keeping me pretty distracted. Will email you back when I read through 🙂

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